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Geezer
Geezer
Jun 04, 2022 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
This poem is part of the challenge:

Neopoet Random Challenge # 16

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Late Night Munchies # II... [Random Challege #16]

Hand full of peanuts
ear for the blues
bottle of aged whiskey
a heart full of you

Piano keys tinkling
Strings are humming
I see the blues
Yes, they're coming

Woman always picking
Blame me everything
But she got a sweet voice
Maaaan, she can sing

Fingers tap the ivory
high notes, guitar strum
Picking those notes
against slow beating drums

Hear my strings wail
the song of love wrong
Sax howling midnight
Feelings so strong

Oh God, am I crazy?
I'm happy with you
where there's whiskey,the munchies
and a thing called the blues

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I like this one better! What do you think?

Review Request Direction: What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Emily Dickenson, Robert Frost, Shakespeare, and many of the poets here at Neopoet.

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

3 years ago

dear Geezer,

I like this one better than the first! it is amazing! my favorite lines:

Hear my strings wail
the song of love wrong
Sax howling midnight
Feelings so strong

I have no suggestions...you nailed it!

*hugs, Cat
ever, eddy

S

scribbler

3 years ago

Hi Gee

Only critique I have is ending 2 lines with "blues". Maybe end 2nd with something like old songs?