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Aug 26, 2018
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Leaders:
Prudent do not need retractions
Focused shun all irrelevance
Wise review and revise actions
Pragmatic strive for a balance
Bold do right heedless of pressure
Good have a moral foundation
Humble not obsessed by power
True walk the talk with clear vision
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
weirdelf
6 years 10 months ago
This is very, very good, mate.
The only thing that makes me hesitate about regarding it as a gem of timeless wisdom is the line-
Pragmatic strive for a balance
I don't think that's what pragmatists basicly do. They seek what works best, with observable results.
If you agree with me then re-wording it to fit your structure and rhyme is your problem. [grins]
Good luck!
oh and I especially like that last line
True walk the talk with clear vision
That's a ripper!
OriginalRhyku
6 years 10 months ago
Weirdelf
It was weird hearing from your self after some time. I hope you are keeping well but seeing that you are now the managing director it looks like you are just flying past the rungs on the Neopoet corporate ladder.
I will clarify the use of Leaders Pragmatic Strive for a Balance - leaders who are pragmatic as far as possible do not engage in partisan squabbling but strive to bring consensus among the different groups / parties and that is where the strive for a Balance comes in. I hope that clears your doubts.
I would like to motivate you to compose, with calm and collected composure, a Haiku / Rhyku that can be safely read by all.
Cheers and congratulations on your prominent professional promotion.
weirdelf
6 years 10 months ago
I just change my sinature from time to time.
No rung climbers here, just poets and volunteers, if ladders are used it is to put out fires. [grins]
My silence is because I'm a lazy bastard and I find good critique as exhausting as composition, though at times just as rewarding.
Yeah, I get it now and perhaps this a gem of timeless wisdom after all.
OriginalRhyku
6 years 10 months ago
Weirdelf
You are being modest and too kind in your rating of my poem but I will take it as the ego needs positive reinforcement.
Cheers.