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Feb 13, 2012
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Leap of Faith
Why make a leap of such great faith alone
When you have a friend there to stand beside?
Another with you should jump in quick stride,
My branches serving as a stepping stone.
This is a jump of great importance, no?
Implying in it a change of magnitude
That may greatly affect your attitude
Toward more than you’d ever wish to know.
But in this leap of faith a friend does come
To aid you in your troubled lonely state;
Finny, with tie about his waist, always late
Did with you fall and in water blossom.
He is your rock and steadfast foundation,
Always ready and willing to strengthen.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: This is something I wrote for my dad's English class. It's roughly a petrarchan sonnet, and the theme is from "A Separate Peace" by John Knowles. I'd love some feedback!
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
weirdelf
13 years 5 months ago
A leap of faith is always a lie.
"Faith is a short-circuit that burns out the brain"
The poem is nicely written though.