Rula

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Legal Addiction

How can I describe this?

Blood is no more running
in my veins,
but ink.

If water stopped to exist,
I won't panic, I have words
to drink.

The crumbs of metaphor
and imagery satisfy
my hunger.

After today I won't rage,
the "iambics" would calm
my anger.

If no more air existed,
I won't care, I shall inhale
my rhymes.

It's okay if all deserted me;
poetry is all I need to fill
my times.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

Favorite Poets: I favor the ones who are closer to humanity and , Poets are humanity when the world lose it.

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Comments

Jackweb

2 years 6 months ago

Oh lovely!

This is one of the awesome piece that dropped down here. This is outstanding and beautifully crafted piece! The title alone is very engaging...You must think about it! Each stanza is beautifully charged with poetic energy. An exceptional verses crafted in a unique way!

Nice job!!!
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Rula

2 years 6 months ago

Hello JackWeb

Thank you so much for your appreciation.
I really value it highly.

Lavender

2 years 6 months ago

Legal Addiction

Hello, Rula,
So clever! This explains your love of poetry and the written word. (As does everything you write.) Creative title and nice rhyme. I enjoyed this!
L

Rula

2 years 6 months ago

Thank you

dear Lavender. Always great to hear from you.
Your kind visits are highly appreciated .

RoseBlack

2 years 6 months ago

This is excellent

I love the play on words and how the poem takes a totally different direction than expected. Great job!

Rula

2 years 6 months ago

Dear Carrie

I'm so thankful for taking the time to read and leave such a supportive comment.
Really appreciate it.
Many thanks dear.

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 6 months ago

I think this is amazing

I was thinking about my addictions today. Many of them replaced the things I loved to do as younger man like art and writing. Earlier I was finishing up some things and I said to myself “you’ve got to go sit down and write.” Not from any necessity other than it’s just where my restless energy needs to go now. As of yet I’ve only written comments, lol. I’m working up to something.

“The crumbs of metaphor
and imagery satisfy
my hunger.”

That’s brilliant,
Tim

Rula

2 years 6 months ago

Hello Tim

I'm so pleased you've decided to write.
Your presence here amongest other masters enriched the site and always raised the challenge standerds.
I'm always flattered when I read your comments.
Thank you so much.