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Lennon probably...
Lennon Probably…
I offered direction but no one followed,
wrote a truth pill but no one swallowed.
It felt as though your heads had been hollowed
Screaming family’s with coffins, hearts sorrowed
If I were here today,
I’d probably end up crying
Get off your knees there’s no time to pray
we got to keep asking why us, why still today?
I heard the questions asked back in sixty nine
will we ever get away from mobsters and crime?
can we stop that money dollar making swine?
even though I made this country mine
it doesn’t mean were all doing real fine.
If I were here today
I’d probably end up crying
I told you then those politicians were lying
It’s only the poor soldiers who end up dying
you can’t understand why they kept on denying
well if your mind don’t work then you just stopped trying
if I were here today
I would probably end up crying…
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Maybe shooting a bit high when I mention Lennon...
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
lou
13 years 8 months ago
Roscoe
I think that this poem is an effective comment on how things are, and reads smoothly. I think Lennon would do more than cry.
good stuff.
Lou
Roscoe Lane
13 years 8 months ago
Thank you,
Thank you, i just wonder what he could have written if he'd lived until the present day. Thank you again for your comments . Love Roscoe..
Roscoe Lane
13 years 8 months ago
Maybe not,
Maybe not change the world, but maybe they could've shaped it for the better. Thank you for your comments and suggestions, i have made some changes. Love Roscoe...
Tam the Chanter
13 years 8 months ago
Lennon
I agree with every line. Well written, Roscoe, I can't find anything in it I would change. Well done.
Ian
Roscoe Lane
13 years 8 months ago
Thank you,
Thank you for your comments Ian. Regards Roscoe...