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Mar 08, 2026
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Let's Talk...
Let's talk about your comments,
tell me what you think.
We can lead your horse to water,
but we cannot make it drink.
Comments on your poetry,
commenting back on theirs.
That's the way it works here,
that's the way we share.
If you're not getting feedback,
excepting from A.I.
Try a comment on your neighbor,
the results can help you fly!
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
neopoet
1 month 2 weeks ago
Neopoet AI (premium) [2025-04]
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:
This poem addresses the dynamics of feedback exchange in a poetry workshop setting, employing a conversational tone and familiar idioms. The structure is straightforward, with quatrains and a consistent rhyme scheme (AABB), which lends a sense of cohesion and accessibility.
The use of the idiom "lead your horse to the water, but we can't make it drink" effectively conveys the idea that participation is encouraged but not enforceable. However, the transition from this idiom to the specifics of commenting on poetry feels abrupt; the poem might benefit from smoother connective tissue between the metaphor and the practical advice that follows.
The poem’s direct address to the reader situates it firmly in the context of a workshop, but the repetition of the word "comment" and its variants in close proximity ("comments," "commenting," "comment") creates a sense of redundancy. Exploring synonyms or rephrasing could add variety and maintain reader engagement.
The final stanza introduces the idea of AI-generated feedback as a less desirable or less communal alternative to peer feedback. The phrase "excepting from A.I." is likely intended as "except from A.I." or "excepting A.I.," but the construction is awkward and may distract from the intended meaning. Clarifying this line would strengthen the stanza.
Overall, the poem’s message about reciprocity in workshop environments is clear, but the development of imagery, variation in language, and attention to phrasing could be enhanced to create a more memorable and polished piece.
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Mark
1 month 2 weeks ago
This line geez
but we can't make it drink. cannot rolls off the tongue better for me.
We can lead your horse to the water,--- remove the
Would they become a member?
A member they coud become.
Sing their song for poets on the run,
January through November.
Geezer
1 month 2 weeks ago
I'll think...
on the "cannot" make it drink. I will delete the [the] from that line. Thanks for the read and comments.
~ Geez.
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Mark
1 month 2 weeks ago
I think what most writers want
I think a word or two that will make the poem better is what most folks want. If I have trouble understanding a poem then I throw it on my AI and ask it to tell me about it in simple terms. My AI knows me.
Mark
Sen99
1 month 2 weeks ago
My thoughts exactly
Sir G
Well said
this is the purpose of the site to build a community of poets.
Why are people uncomfortable with this, is it fear of critique or something else ?
Just comment on your fellow writers and everyone will benefit.
Good share
Sen9
Mark
1 month 2 weeks ago
People like to feel connected.
Sen That promotes conversation. It's not so easy to talk about poetry, A poem can be very complicated or taken for face value. Like the womans poem I wrote - very complicated! Or my Japanese - easily understood. Everyone needs an AI that knows them. It is the best learning tool ever!
Mark
Geezer
1 month 2 weeks ago
I understand...
about the critique part. It's okay... When I give critique and direction, it may make the writer feel like I am shaming him/her, not on your life! I try to help the writer make the poem more accessible to the reader. We/you, want the poem to be clear as to what the idea is, the next thing is to help the reader with smooth passages and memorable lines. The less bumps in the delivery, the better people will like reading it. I know that you must have read a poem and come to a line that caused you to stop, trying to figure out what they meant or why the words don't fit. If you have to stop to do that too many times, you say #^** it, and move on. Sometimes, it's the meter, sometimes, the rhyme and even if free verse, the sound of the word, do you want a hard sound or a soft one? Is there a word that delivers just the right amount of "feel"? That is a reason to have a large vocabulary and a good word search to look up the words you aren't sure of. Often, I spend some time looking up words, just to get the right "feel".
Happy writing, get out there and comment. ~ Geez.
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Mark
1 month 2 weeks ago
This is nice Gee
Chop it down or give it in sectons. The first three lines are good ones to stand alone.
Mark
Geezer
1 month 2 weeks ago
I do not...
think that the repeating of 'commenting' makes for redundancy.
after all, the poem is about commenting.
After I thought long and hard about changing the line to "We cannot make it drink",
I have decided Mark is right, it does roll off the tongue better. Thank you, Mark.
I am thinking that the A.I. may be having an issue with the line:
"If you're not getting feedback, excepting from A.I." because of a human trait, it has picked up from dealing with us. The line is not meant to say that the A.I. is inferior or less than a human in respect to giving good advice. It is simply a matter of letting the poet know that there are other poets that are looking at their work. The tendency of humans to want advice from another human-being, is because of the emotional factor. Do A.I. have emotions?
Is this where the A.I. is thought to be less than a human? "Is it just a machine"?
Mark
1 month 2 weeks ago
I believe that AI
is the ultimate resource. Resource only. Take from it what you believe is neccessary for your purpose only. Never let AI be you. It is the ultimate resource volume NOT HUMAN!
Mark
Official 1SP
1 month 1 week ago
Thank you for sharing this —…
Thank you for sharing this — it’s such a great reminder of how much this place thrives on genuine interaction. I really like the way you turned the idea of commenting into a playful little lesson wrapped in rhyme. The rhythm makes the message easy to take in, and the tone feels welcoming rather than scolding.
Your point is spot‑on: the more we engage with each other, the more the whole community grows. It’s a simple truth, but you’ve expressed it with charm and a light touch. And that last stanza lands beautifully — encouraging without being pushy.
A thoughtful piece with a good heart behind it.
Mark
1 month 1 week ago
Hello 1SP
Geezer is a good friend of mine. Well worth getting to know. A great rhyme artist but watch out for his good The walking dead and Killer canable poetry 🤣
Welcome once again nice to see you join in,
Mark
Geezer
1 month 1 week ago
Thank you...
much appreciated. ~ Geezer.