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Jan 17, 2025
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Letter to my future self
Just a bit of gratitude I need,
As love, to plant this awesome seed.
Never giving up on my gifts and dreams,
Under all or any worse extremes.
Alas these days are all too short,
Reality bites like it's a sport.
Yet, the future's yours to write.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Letter to my future self, is an acrostic poem. The poem spells January, if you read down from each first letter,vof each line. This poem was inspired by the craft I did at my weekly craft group (which I co-lead). A craft group session in which 2 other people were inspired to try their hand at poetry. I wanted this poem to be positive and hopeful in nature.
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
neopoet
6 months ago
Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Letter to my future self" appears to be a reflection on the poet's current state and a message of encouragement for the future. The use of rhyming couplets gives the poem a rhythmic quality that aids in the delivery of the message.
The first two lines introduce the theme of gratitude and love, which are presented as necessary for the growth of the 'awesome seed', possibly a metaphor for potential or future success. The use of 'awesome seed' could be more concrete or specific to give readers a clearer understanding of what the poet is referring to.
The third and fourth lines continue this theme of perseverance, with the poet vowing to stay committed to their 'gifts and dreams' regardless of the challenges. The use of 'extremes' suggests significant obstacles, but it might be more effective to provide examples or more detailed descriptions of these challenges to make the struggle more relatable to readers.
The fifth and sixth lines shift the focus to the fleeting nature of time and the harshness of reality. The metaphor 'Reality bites like it's a sport' is a strong image, but it could be more effective if it were tied more closely to the themes introduced earlier in the poem.
The final line offers a hopeful note, reminding the poet that they have control over their future. This is a strong ending, but it might be more impactful if it were tied more closely to the themes of gratitude, love, and perseverance introduced earlier in the poem.
Overall, the poem could benefit from more specific imagery and a tighter thematic focus. The themes of gratitude, love, perseverance, and control over one's future are strong, but they could be developed more fully and tied together more effectively.
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Rula
6 months ago
Bravo!
Nice message between the lines.
Usually the acrostic poem title takes the same initials.
This is something I learnt lately after writing many of them great attempt, theme and execution.
Thank you for sharing!