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Dec 05, 2020
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Life’s tower wilting by the hour
Life at first builds
up into a
tall tremendous
tower getting
stronger by the hour .
But time took
its usual
toll and it
started to wilt away
to the weak
feeble flower.
That
willingly lets death devour
it down to a
measly sickly
seed that lies
deep within the land
of yesterday .
— Edward nigma, Dec 05, 2020
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Lavender
5 years 6 months ago
Life's Tower Wilting by the Hour
Hi, Edward,
In just a few words, you successfully built the tower and then completely wilted it - I could feel the sadness and devastation of it all. "...deep within the land of yesterday." Strong ending.
Thank you,
L
Edward nigma
5 years 6 months ago
Thank you
Thank you
Edward nigma
5 years 6 months ago
Thank you
I got the idea from Benjamin button the one thing the end and the beginning have in common
Is that you begin with nothing and then you end with nothing.
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