life

jewelled studs
stretched to forever
in an endlessly encompassing
quiescent deep

a panorama
aglow

an intangible taste
of a vast breadth
with future in potential
that shimmers just out of reach
.

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story

Comments

Ian.T

12 years 6 months ago

Judy

As the stars we stretch to eternity, only man want's to limit things purely by his own limitations of physical Life.
As you are aware there is more than a physical being that only lasts a few years.
Lovely write, Yours, Ian.T

judyanne

12 years 6 months ago

thanks ian

i just did an edit - hope you still relate to it
love judy
xxx

scribbler

12 years 6 months ago

Hi Judy

You know me and the KISS principle lol. I think a simpler word than quiescent would fit better. Something like still or calm. And last line....maybe beyond rather than out of. Just a few ideas from a rank beginner........stan