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life is a dove
life is a dove that soars through the misty sky full ambitious flamboyant fury never noticing that our soft white feathers of time starts To peal and now
its fearing that death is near and it turns blue and sheds a tear for it desperately doesn’t want to face that fear but still it flies right on by .
But then one day all of its feathers of time have all fallen off and realize to suprise that our world is over and our dove now plumitts down through the sorrowful sea of its joyous memories and once that sea of our memory finally subsides it then it washes away it’s tears and dies.
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Lavender
4 years 10 months ago
life is a dove
Hello, Hayden,
"...sorrowful sea of its joyous memories..." Just a few words which hold so much.
Thank you,
L
Edward nigma
4 years 9 months ago
Thank you
Thank you I hope your doing well in this time of mass hysteria
Lavender
4 years 9 months ago
Mass Hysteria
You are so kind - we all could use some serenity and peace.
L
Edward nigma
4 years 9 months ago
My inspiration
https://youtu.be/BypeRyrtGJg
Lavender
4 years 9 months ago
The Lords of Flatbush / Wedding Song
Pretty wonderful...
L
scribbler
4 years 9 months ago
Hello
Good to see some poetic prose well done
Edward nigma
4 years 9 months ago
Thank you
Thank you