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Jul 14, 2022
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Life Worth Living Let's Fade Into You
Life Worth Living Let's Fade Into You
Life is given not for the asking ....
it's given by couples
on the beaches basking
as time moves on to a newer lifestyle
we may belong to sans all around
let's fade within each other too
now who
knows life belongs to woe.
some are firm
they will return
I ask em when ....
the sea is blue
does it not profile
a different hue
that is different
all remain silent
when the time comes
neither I can wait nor you
so till then enjoy life's view
from far and anew
life shall fade away
for me and you
no new hue
nor view
just silently fade away
we too
okay two
you and me sans everything
now hear me
for the last time
I need a silent kiss
fresh as new
let's
fade now
'tis due
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
3 years ago
Bittersweet sentiment. Every
Bittersweet sentiment. Every rose has thorns after all.
“just silently fade away
we too
okay two
you and me sans everything
now hear me
for the last time
I need a silent kiss
fresh as new
let's
fade now
'tis due“
Really interesting. The time is NOW. The future isn’t in the bank.
Beautiful poem,
Tim
lovedly
2 years 12 months ago
NOT BITTER but
sweet thanks for d repeat lol
Geezer
3 years ago
A silent kiss...
Just her and I
I would prefer to keep it that way
We have to keep each other new
Because sooner or later, it comes due. Nice work lovedly. ~ Geez.
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lovedly
3 years ago
KINDLY give HER a kiss
mouth freshening lipsticks smacking But silently
then I will know you passed by me
lol thnx 4 d review
it's BLUE
WOH WHOOOO
Lord Barham
2 years 11 months ago
comment
I like this! I had to read through a couple of times to get what you were saying and I like the way you have used "sans" as a noun, so the line, translated, reads, "We may belong to without all around". This is the kind of wordplay ee cummings was so fond of, since, "without" can also mean that which is outside of oneself or one's domicile.
lovedly
2 years 11 months ago
SIR
You are making me feel I am ee cummings ...at least his apparition
I also use without about
as about a periphery and hope ee cummings is turning in his grave
unless he was converted into ashes
SANS all is what Shakespeare would say
he alone so far has said it
I traced
thankx
Lord Barham
2 years 11 months ago
reply to reply
Ah, so although you were original in how you used it, the bard preceded you! It must be gratifying to find yourself in such illustrious company!
lovedly
2 years 11 months ago
and of course
the two must be missing me
at night I hear voices
earlier 'twas only my MOM'S
now two will add on
gong gong
till I Bang on
lol
milordz
Ray Whitaker
2 years 11 months ago
Very nice!
Love the sentiment. Love your use of white space in this poem!
lovedly
2 years 11 months ago
WHITE SPACE
Did you mean
WILD
space
friend
Ray
Ray Whitaker
2 years 11 months ago
White space
The space in between the written words and stanzas…
lovedly
2 years 11 months ago
thanks Ray
didn't notice it
someone says I compose like
Shakespeare
anther says e e cummings
yet to day just some one added....
Emily Dickinson
how many more said like this or that
but Ray do you know
I read none but Shakes'''''
now more of you ...shorter ones mainly