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Jun 07, 2016
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LIghting grace
Finding the favor of a new start
with a process flowing down stream
emotions like love, comfort and passion became
a mainstay for returning to a human with life.
My mother passed oh very hard to accept
three years pass and my daughter died being only 30.
Parts of my soul were healing at a slower rate.
Years passed age of life were differences in health.
Maybe thirty years left before going home
with the thought of my final place of rest
receiving lighting grace.
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About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
Esker
9 years 4 months ago
mortality the keystone of empathy
losses
comforts
wandering in the hurt
daze
i did it
went through it
I like how U use lightnin
as a definitive
clause in understanding
of an awakening
thank U!
judyanne
9 years 4 months ago
hello Betty
Welcome to neopoet
i really like your write - it is quite emotive
but it reads to me somewhat more like prose than poetry
(Please know that this is in my opinion only - I'm no expert on free form poetry)
Just me - I would cull it somewhat
the favor of a new start
flowing down stream
love, comfort and passion became
a mainstay
in the return to humanity
within three years
the passing of both
my mother and daughter
parts of my soul
healing at a slower rate
with the thought of my final place of rest
Home - receiving lighting grace
Love judy
xxx