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Nov 11, 2012
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lilac moons from a master
As Infinitesimal leaves
plucked by a great seer
it started,
half-light birthed
and a lilac moon erupted,
from a crown of pine
all this,
concealing
a master at work
I observed,
invisible hands
slowly smear the canvas,
Water Lilies now splash
in my pastel sky,
astonished
existing for eons,
since waters lapped
at Uluru,
since hanging rock
was submerged
never knowing a glory
of impression,
wedges of oceans had
separated
now,
lifetimes later,
Monet
paints the sky
in my awe
as bat wings spread
moving life,
through nights grandeur
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Ian.T
12 years 8 months ago
Jayne
A reflection of Monet to remind you of the same sky that watched over the two great Islands that joined to make your Country and putting Uluru in the middle, a great write as usual.
Take care out there, Yours Ian.T
Seren
12 years 8 months ago
Thank you Ian
Very glad to know you enjoyed this one
It's one of my favourites the lilac moon
was in our night sky so very real and
Beautiful I hope I did it justice
Love always JC xxx
sueb
12 years 8 months ago
beautiful poem gr8 imagery
beautiful poem gr8 imagery much enjoyed thanks
Seren
12 years 8 months ago
thanks sueb
Glad you enjoyed the read
Regards Jayne-Chloe
weirdelf
12 years 8 months ago
Beautifully written, great imagery
but Monet? Give me a break!
Monet's use of light doesn't fit Australian light except perhaps ... well I can't think where, none of Australian light or landscape bears any resemblance to Monet's vision.
Seren
12 years 8 months ago
Jess
I wrote this after witnessing a spectacular sunset ... It is what it is don't read it if it offends, I wrote it how I saw it ..its called poetic licence
Cheers JC
weirdelf
12 years 8 months ago
Like Stephen Fry said, offense is taken, not given.
I wasn't offended, just critiquing.
You saw a Monet sunset in Australia? then I'm just jealous [grins]
Seren
12 years 8 months ago
Jess
Smile I saw what I saw the colours were magnificent ... Anyhow its just a silly poem not finished maybe Monet can be substituted for a Aussie artist ... It's a good point I can see what you meen ... I'm open to suggestions
Cheers JC
weirdelf
12 years 8 months ago
nup, do your own research
I googled images "Australian artists sunsets" and found no fit.
Seren
12 years 8 months ago
No problem at all ...
No problem at all ...
Cheers JC