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raj
Nov 09, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Liquid Desire

pink and crimson
are your sighs and moans
submerging in the splendor of white
in a rainbow arch you rise to steal
the riot of colors with a squeal

raj (sublime_ocean)

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

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Comments

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raj

13 years 8 months ago

Hi Rosina

thank you for the read and your comment..i hope it was effective in as much as reminiscing with a smile...:)

much love..

Race_9togo

Race_9togo

13 years 8 months ago

Raj

Now I know why you are also called sublime_ocean.

How beautiful this is, in the moment of its capture, and the way the reach of soaring pleasure starts physical, rises into delight, and then is brought back into the flesh, at the ending.

Sublime, my friend

R

raj

13 years 8 months ago

Hi Jim

like Rosina..you too captured the essence of this write perfectly....thanks for the read and your encouraging comment...

loved

loved

13 years 8 months ago

Delightfully

Orgasmic feeling
And
The culmination of the eruption
And
Anointment,
In the milk divine
A sealing of human ecstasy
Soaring as it collapses

loved

loved

13 years 8 months ago

Friend Raj

ur wonderful...
i have just converted this piece as
Ecstasy
u may read
as it is inspired by
uuuuuuuuuuuuu
thanks

loved

loved

13 years 8 months ago

UR

not only sublime
but as you say an ocean
and i now know when ............

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

13 years 7 months ago

Dear Raj,

sweetly erotic, not brash. Takes me to nice dreamy places. You take my breath away with this piece.

always, Cat

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raj

13 years 7 months ago

Dear Cat

thank you for your time and visit to this write...good to know from your comment that you found it effective...means a lot to receive such encouraging comment from the likes of you...

much love..

Rainy Day

Rainy Day

13 years 3 months ago

Perfect Explaination

Perfect words to explain something which leaves us speechless. I loved your use of color. Beautiful.

R

raj

13 years 2 months ago

Thank you for the read and

Thank you for the read and your comment....it feels good when the reader partakes in the essence of what i try to express through the lines...

R

raj

13 years 2 months ago

Hi Judyanne

good to see you and thank you\ for your appreciation...your comment made me smile because you got it right.,...it is in fact a blend of both love n lust i had intended to convey through those colors.:)

much love n hugz...

S

scribbler

13 years 3 months ago

Hi raj!

I was beginning to think you'd dropped off the face of the earth lol. This is a really effective use of transposing imagery and also pleasant to read..............stan

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raj

13 years 2 months ago

Hi Stan

it is always good to hear from your Stan and your humor ..i am still here on this planet so don't believe that i am ghost writing :lol...fun apart...thank you for your comment ..means a lot for an amateur like me...

mand

mand

11 years 6 months ago

Hi Raj

I am a fan of your poetry! I love the skill you use - you are truly a word smith - you dig deep and your work is inspiring. You have a furtive imagination and use wonderful imagery.

Thank you for sharing you talent.

Love Mand xxxxx

R

raj

4 years 11 months ago

Hi Mand

I returned here few weeks back after a long spell of absence...just now noticed that I had not responded to your comment..good to know you liked this short write and it even created imagery for you..

would love to see you write again..

much love...