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Apr 19, 2012
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~Listen. A whisper~
Able to understand.
Listen. A Whisper.
Secrets known but unearthed.
Help me to be what I am not,
Myself.
Truth revealed, only seconds to heal
Stop. I can't be
unbroken.
It's what you understand
that keeps you
Able.
Listen. A whisper
Secrets known but unearthed
Help me to be what I am,
not myself. Truth revealed, only seconds
Stop. unbroken,
I can't be.
It's what you understand,
that keeps you Able to understand.
Listen.
a whisper
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Eduardo Cruz
13 years 6 months ago
Very good!
I like what you did here, you wrote it as the thoughts came of self and not, confusion. I like it because I felt the fear of unsure of what shall come. I also enjoyed the way you structure the lines. A very good first post.
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weirdelf
13 years 6 months ago
This gives me the creeps
It is like asking the significant other to work it out without you giving honest information.
Communication works both ways.
Candlewitch
13 years 5 months ago
hello and welcome to neopoet!
hello and welcome to neopoet! For some reason, your title annoys me: ~Listen. A Whisper~ I think it maybe that i find tilda's and periods distracting in the title. Perhaps: Listen, a Whisper or Listen... A Whisper this is just my opinion. I liked these lines:
Help me to be what I am not,
Myself.
Truth revealed, only seconds to heal
Stop. I can't be
unbroken.
always, Cat
raj
13 years 5 months ago
Hello Felicia
Welcome to Neopoet fraternity...it is nice to read a new style of expression...