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Apr 03, 2012
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lonely dreams tanka
My friend, yellow lined
Made my lonely dreams come true
Gold collections grew
Images in my minds eye
Gems etched in italic print
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Eastern
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
weirdelf
13 years 3 months ago
Exquisitely etched
a lovely tanka.
No crit. Although I hate poems in italics, the metaphor works.
Barbara Writes
13 years 3 months ago
thanks
I like seeing words in italics it has a softness to it. like you mentioned the metaphor work well. Glad you like it