Neopoet Weekly 05/19/24 to 05/25/24

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THE LONELY ROAD

The road ahead wears rough, there lies my path,
To greater heights my story calmly calls,
Fire and fiery pours success bath,
A ministry for sunshine, dipped in galls.

O lonely road, how long comes the strive,
Slow air, gushing winds; the only followers I boast,
Alone a lone warrior walks, breezing towards cold survive,
Step on steps, till I enlarge my coast.

Of saviours and sorcerers, in beliefs my hope sustain,
Tears and trials, sailing in glory's creed,
Through hails and storms, I hope my doctrine maintain,
For I've been born again, to become a disciple indeed.

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About the Author

Region, Country: Nigeria, NGA

Favorite Poets: Niyi osunadare, William Morris, Alfred lord Tennyson, William Blake, William Shakespeare, John Milton and many more

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1 year 1 month ago

Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "THE LONELY ROAD" effectively conveys a sense of perseverance and determination in the face of challenges. The imagery of a rough road symbolizing the journey towards success is powerful. The use of contrasting elements like fire and success, loneliness and followers, and tears and glory adds depth to the poem. The theme of personal growth and transformation is evident throughout the piece. Consider refining the structure and flow of the poem to enhance its impact further. Additionally, exploring more vivid and sensory language could help immerse the reader deeper into the emotions and experiences described.

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