Long Time Lived

High gravity days
that pass so slowly
in a grey haze
days never-endin
mean I guess
my life is subjectively

extended

I must confess
it feels I've been around
for a thousand years
more or less

It ain’t all bad
in those dark extended times
not even sad
still dance a jig
now and then
for the nature of me is

irrepressible

So maybe when
I meet my young man’s death
I won’t lament
A life misspent
but glory in its joy

unrepentant

I am the friend that lived
despite all odds
fast drunken driving
dangerous drugs
smart-arse words in hostile company
thriving on extremity

the darkest acts
seemed at the time
like a good idea
don't they all?

I didn’t deserve to live
but I did
many others slipped away so easily
I will never understand
but hope to earn the privilege
retrospectively

Of knowing why

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Sydney, Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: The Romantics, The Mersey Sound, The Beats and, of course, The Bard

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Comments

Sparrow

6 years ago

Jess

A very good write of searching for reasons of being.
Just found out this evening that one of my apprentices passed away on 12th of June I only wished him happy birthday a couple of days ago, these things catch up with us and it is a very sad year in those respects.
Now I hear your voice asking why you have been on the journey you have, did you not think that in your learning of all these, things you have learned so much.
So you should write these things down not just in poetry but as a Biography. Ask yourself how many have learned from watching you and listening to your ways .. The poem Is great just now need the story lol Take care my Brother we walk the same pathways , Yours Ian ..

Marthalyn

6 years ago

Love the flow

You have strung your words together with a simple flow, yet full of the questions many of us know. I can relate to all of it and agree with the Sparrow's review. The survivors become the teachers of those who may need a bit of help in learning how. If I have anything to critique in this, it would be to manage punctuation or leave it out entirely.

Respectfully,

Geezer

6 years ago

I agree...

with the comments and critique here, I just want add, that I would leave out the punctuation too; just leaving the question marks. Hmmmm… Would that we might know, the ways and means of Fate or whatever passes for the highway of our lives. I too, have been subject to many of the effects of life on the wild side and wonder; "How the Hell am I still here?" I really hope that we get to find out! ~ Gee.
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