LOSS

As the fire burns down
the old man feeds it a log
then sits back and dreams

Long past days of youth
bring a quiet smile to his face
memories of her

He then remembers
and the smile melts like spring snow
loneliness takes hold

About This Poem

Last Few Words: another shot at brevity in free verse

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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Comments

alidzain

11 years 4 months ago

Hi Stan

There's a typo on stanza 3 line 3

(loneliness) takes hold.

Other than that, I have no comment. All's good.

Alid

scribbler

11 years 4 months ago

Thanks Alid

I would have though spell checker to have caught that. appreciate the eagle eye.........stan

raj

11 years 4 months ago

a nice crisp poem combining

a nice crisp poem combining warmth, fire, spring and love...

scribbler

11 years 4 months ago

hello

thanks for taking the time to read this little scribble.........stan

magics02

11 years 3 months ago

Somehow I got an email about Neopoet in my inbox today and forgot my password. Suddenly remembered it and see you are here. Have missed you all and know that I think of you often. Hope everyone is fine. Still in college courses and have gone through the past year missing my father terribly. Hope to log in again soon and read some works.

Mona

scribbler

11 years 3 months ago

Hi Mona

Neopoet has been having tech problems recently ans sent out e-mails when site got back on line. I know losing one's father is a rough thing to endure. Drop by when you can.........stan