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Jan 19, 2015
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The Loss of Another
Winter bares its naked trees
tracing my eyes
with a blizzard wonderland
as I seek to find
an end to the strife
playing hide and seek with ghosts
that never try to find me
burgeoning an anger,
a sorrow,
that pushes against my skin
like a polyester suit
tailored twenty pounds too tight.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
wesley snow
10 years 5 months ago
Good language use.
I don't however, quite understand the title. In the poem I can see no reference to "the loss of another". I may have missed it.
eightmenout
10 years 5 months ago
Sir
The loss is described in winter baring it's naked
Thanks for stopping by and giving your input
Rula
10 years 5 months ago
Loved the images
there.
And what sir Wesley said about the title.
eightmenout
10 years 5 months ago
Dearest Rula
Thanks for the input. See me reply above.
Rula
10 years 5 months ago
This is what I thought
but wasn't sure.
Thank you for sharing Scott.
alidzain
10 years 5 months ago
good one bro
love it.
Alid
eightmenout
10 years 5 months ago
Thanks Alid
Thanks Alid