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Lost Friends

Where have you been?
I missed our time here
when we will all gather
to fulfill our writing desire.

The silence stretched too long.
The waiting, a real torture.
Are you well, my dear friends?
Sometimes I do wonder.

There is an emptiness,
I can't explain.
I hope you will recover
if you are in pain.

The candlelight in my heart
has been snuffed out
and the looming darkness that comes,
makes me want to shout.

I wish you well,
wherever you are.
I missed all of you
'cos you shine like a star.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: singapore, SGP

Favorite Poets: Emily Dickinson, Robert Frost, Sarojini Naidu and friends in Neopoet.

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Comments

jane210660

jane210660

8 years 7 months ago

Hi Alidzain, although rather

Hi Alidzain, although rather sad and a bit lonely in a way, I enjoyed this write. I think you managed to capture the friendship and loneliness you can get from an internet site. As poets, we show glimpses of our souls and get to know one another on quite a profound level and then on a personal level, we hardly touch the surface. Then when someone doesn't write or post for a while, you do wonder if they are ok.
Hope you are well by the way :-)
Jx

alidzain

alidzain

8 years 7 months ago

Hi Jane

I really missed rula, jayne and a few others whom I have grown fond of here. This piece is written from the bottom of my heart. It just pours out. I'm quite well and busy here as I am one of the members of the local Malay Poet Society apart from my daily job and I'm attending classes to learn about public talk t improve my confidence. Hope you well too.

Alid

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

8 years 7 months ago

hello,

Jane took the thoughts in my head and put them into words! I can really relate to this poem.

always, Cat

alidzain

alidzain

8 years 7 months ago

Thanks, Cat

I'm just lonely I guess and can't stop thinking of everyone especially Jayne whose works have really inspired me alot.

Alid

lovedly

lovedly

8 years 7 months ago

we are lonely

all and most poets are
know it
never get attached
remain detached
some know how to learn if you'd like to

i lose a friend every moment
every now and then
where is man jess
all guess

alidzain

alidzain

8 years 7 months ago

loved

given a choice, I don't want to lose any of my friends but this is life. You don't always get what you want.

Alid

V

valene

8 years 7 months ago

your words ring true

This is the first poem of yours I've had the pleasure of reading. Although it does have a sad tone to it, it reads easily. Your thoughts flow from one verse to the next and they convey your emotions in a well conceived way. I haven't been on the site for awhile, but I can relate to what you're saying because I'd been on another site a few years back, and when people I'd 'connected with, for whatever reason, seemed to disappear, it left me with an empty feeling. The hardest part for me being on a site is that I either become all consumed by it, and suddenly find that other things I'd planned on doing had to be put off, or just the opposite happens....I get caught up in day to day living and my time on the site gets put off. Long story short, I did enjoy the read, understand what you're saying and hope you're not feeling too lonely!
valene

alidzain

alidzain

8 years 7 months ago

Valene

Thanks for the visit, the read and the comment. Maybe I need to give others a chance to fill up the emptiness abit. It won't be the same but its better than whining and doing nothing.

Alid

V

valene

8 years 7 months ago

very wise

It was my pleasure, and I think you're very wise to opening your mind to new possibilities. You'll never know who's out there till you give it a shot!

Best wishes,
val

jane210660

jane210660

8 years 7 months ago

I think as Valene says, some

I think as Valene says, some of us tend to dib in and out of sites - and it can very much be all or nothing. That doesn't mean when folks aren't here, they're gone for good. It may just be, they aren't writing or that poetry has taken a back seat for a while.
I'm not writing at the moment - it just ain't happening, but I do have time on my hands, so I bob in regularly, to read what others have written. If I get back to work, I know poetry will have to take a back seat for a while, but that won't mean I've forgotten about here or the people I've met. I think one of the things about an internet site, is it can be as big or as small a part of your life as you wish and at varying times in life this can change.
It must be gratifying to see how much of a chord your lovely poem has struck. Jxx

T

Tee M. Allison

8 years 7 months ago

Dark

I've never been quite so good at keeping friends. There is the immediate interest and texting frenzy where i want to hang out and do everything with them, but as time goes on, i drift away, unable to keep up with the initial momentum. I read your poem and just wondered about those I left in the dark, and those that left me in torturous darkness with fear of the light. Fear of light not because of the brightness, but fear of such a time when that light would disappear.
These are basic conversational words that together form something so deep for me. It's amazing.

alidzain

alidzain

8 years 7 months ago

Hi there!

I think most people drift away when they have responsibilities or different interests. I think you can keep life interesting when you are spontaneous. Being a friend is not about being together all the time, but how much you care for them and accept their good and bad. If you are thinking about them, then mayhaps you are still their friends even though you didn't see them most of the time. You see, you won't think about them if they don't mean anything to you. At least, that's what I think.

If you get bored doing things the same things everytime, then suggest another activity. If you don't want the light to disappear, you need to reach out. A simple text message like "How are you doing?" just to show you are thinking about them is good.

Alid