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Dec 29, 2012
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lost in the ripples
Mirrored mountains gleam
Ripples erase reflections
Water moves away
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
weirdelf
12 years 6 months ago
A lovely haiku
with the most profound quality required of haiku
"Water moves away"
Brilliant!
Seren
12 years 6 months ago
thanks Jess
I appreciate it I've been writing lots of haiku I am exploring the boundaries
Cheers Jc xxx
Rula
12 years 6 months ago
Painted really well lovely!!
Painted really well
lovely!!
Seren
12 years 6 months ago
thanks Rula
Very glad you like it
Regards Jc x
Seren
12 years 6 months ago
hey Beau
I really appreciate your comment ... I finished another today will post it later tonight
Love Jc xxx
BlueDemon77
12 years 6 months ago
I am lost in the ripples with you.
Perfect image, placid, I can see, hear, smell, and feel it. Wonderful work!
Ron
Seren
12 years 6 months ago
Ron
Thank you so much I've been working hard on the series there are many more just not ready for posting
Thanks for the great comment makes it all worthwhile
Regards Jc xxx
Ian.T
12 years 6 months ago
Jayne
A good Haiku now here is one for you:-
Serendipity (happy accident (;-)
when all our poets dreams come true
They should write it down
Have a lovely day hey, Yours Ian.T
Seren
12 years 6 months ago
smiles for miles
And the answer to your haiku will be my next post in half an hour lol
Glad you liked it
Love always Jc xxx
scribbler
12 years 6 months ago
Hi Jayne
Dang! Now you've got Me thinking about Haiku and I never can write just one lol. I liked the way you pointed out the delicacy of reflections on water..............stan
Seren
12 years 6 months ago
hey Stan
Really glad you enjoyed my little haiku ... I've been bothered by the Muse of late lol
Look forward to reading a haiku from you !!
Love Jc xxx
weirdelf
12 years 6 months ago
hey Stan
remember my "Haikookas"?
You can write haikus in a series, but the condition is each one must be able to stand alone.
sueb
12 years 6 months ago
gorgeous
gorgeous
Seren
12 years 6 months ago
Thanks Sue glad you liked it
Thanks Sue glad you liked it