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lost in the ripples

Mirrored mountains gleam
Ripples erase reflections
Water moves away

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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weirdelf

weirdelf

12 years 6 months ago

A lovely haiku

with the most profound quality required of haiku
"Water moves away"
Brilliant!

Seren

Seren

12 years 6 months ago

thanks Jess

I appreciate it I've been writing lots of haiku I am exploring the boundaries

Cheers Jc xxx

Seren

Seren

12 years 6 months ago

hey Beau

I really appreciate your comment ... I finished another today will post it later tonight

Love Jc xxx

Seren

Seren

12 years 6 months ago

Ron

Thank you so much I've been working hard on the series there are many more just not ready for posting
Thanks for the great comment makes it all worthwhile

Regards Jc xxx

Ian.T

Ian.T

12 years 6 months ago

Jayne

A good Haiku now here is one for you:-

Serendipity (happy accident (;-)
when all our poets dreams come true
They should write it down

Have a lovely day hey, Yours Ian.T

Seren

Seren

12 years 6 months ago

smiles for miles

And the answer to your haiku will be my next post in half an hour lol

Glad you liked it

Love always Jc xxx

S

scribbler

12 years 6 months ago

Hi Jayne

Dang! Now you've got Me thinking about Haiku and I never can write just one lol. I liked the way you pointed out the delicacy of reflections on water..............stan

Seren

Seren

12 years 6 months ago

hey Stan

Really glad you enjoyed my little haiku ... I've been bothered by the Muse of late lol
Look forward to reading a haiku from you !!

Love Jc xxx

weirdelf

weirdelf

12 years 6 months ago

hey Stan

remember my "Haikookas"?
You can write haikus in a series, but the condition is each one must be able to stand alone.