Lost At Sea

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem effectively employs metaphors related to water—such as "river of caring," "sponge," "lost at sea," and "well is dry"—to illustrate emotional exhaustion and numbness. However, the repeated use of water imagery becomes somewhat mixed and contradictory ("dry as a bone" yet "lost at sea"), potentially weakening the clarity and coherence of the central metaphor. Clarifying or refining these metaphors could strengthen the poem's overall impact.

Additionally, the language and phrasing ("my heart is jaded," "feel anything," "numbing sensation") lean toward abstract, generalized expressions of emotional states. Introducing more concrete imagery or specific experiences could ground the reader more firmly in the speaker's emotional reality and enhance the poem's resonance.

The repetition of the phrase "lost at sea" is effective in emphasizing the speaker's sense of disorientation and helplessness. However, exploring this metaphor more deeply—perhaps by incorporating imagery related to navigation, drifting, or storms—could enrich the emotional complexity and depth of the poem.

Lastly, the poem's structure and line breaks are straightforward and consistent, but experimenting with varied line lengths, stanza breaks, or punctuation might help accentuate the emotional shifts and pacing, providing the reader with a more nuanced experience of the speaker's emotional journey.

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I think this is worth a longer look. ~ Geez.
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Hi Cat, your poem captures the emotional exhaustion at being overwhelmed by the current situation in the world which I think we are all feeling. The metaphor of being "lost at sea" is striking. The contrast with the imagery of dryness, nicely done. It's a strong reflection on burnout and the struggle to reconnect with our emotions in this climate of fear and worry. Well done, Ruby xx

that we have many who feel as that we have no control over the government, but we do. They must accept the fact that if they do not take care of our best interests, we will fire them and elect someone else. We are not always going to agree on what is the best course of action, but the interests of "The People" should always be met. At any rate, I enjoyed the conversation, as much as the poem, which I think says much for your poem. What good comes of any work, that does not inspire someone else to tell another story? Nicely done, ~ Geez.
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Yo\u have been found
The winds of faith found you
And took you to Me
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Having been on a ship in a cyclone, this makes so much sense. The best part, I found, is about being dry as a bone in the desert in stark contrast to the unquestionably wet situation of lostness at sea- such a dramatic interplay.

Oh that would have been an adventure we’re it so! I have friends and family in the navy, so have been on board for voyages over the years. I was for a short time part of a sailing and fishing crew, mostly dabbling for an adventure, working holiday type arrangements. Doing well enough to be around. Hope you are doing well yourself, Cat.