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The Love

There are things that
heart and emotions
can not explain.

Feelings of
hurt, love and pain
are one and the same.

But the love for
someone will only
grow, fade or
stay the same.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

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Comments

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 5 months ago

I think this is pretty complete

Quick, expressive, truthful. One quick suggestion…

Feelings of
hurt, love and pain
are one in (and) the same.

I believe the saying is “one and the same”

Being from Rhode Island when people say that it totally sounds like “one ‘n’ the same”. What’s worse is that we’ve basically lost the “r” sound from our speech. “My sista Dah-lene makes a supa good chowdah.” Our state begins with that sound. Lol