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Mar 11, 2014
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Lovely embrace..
Let me embrace you young one...
as I need warmth all over my face...
so let’s embrace...
warmth will flow from me to you...
as we curl up in embrace
and that’s no disgrace...
we love each other’s face
so we in public embrace
come on now gals and guys
face to face just to
E M B R A C E
and
see eye to
E Y E
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
raj
11 years 4 months ago
Loved
The theme is thoughtful if you wish to communicate that one should not be embarrassed to hug each other irrespective of caste, color, race, creed, gender. Different communities and people have different traditions and I am told Italians do that a lot. Having said that, through experiences good and bad, such actions may not be in the comfort zone for all. Therefore, in my opinion it would not be right for all to hug and/or embrace. However, you can generalize use of "embrace" in your poem in the context of embracing beliefs, ideas, policies, ideologies, standards, etc., etc. if not physically. Just a thought.
Regards,
loved
11 years 4 months ago
slight variation
in the AMERICAS
including Canada
as also UK
and Europe
you can just enter any mall /airport
and
see a couple hugging ...just here and there ...anywhere
unmindful of any one like birds and bees
something not done in the East
the hug stands here
as it is
thanks for your desire
to cultivate