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a lovenote from the author
it’s the excitement
of running into your parents’
long, strong arms
after they arrive home from work.
maybe it’s in the back of a car,
or sitting on a pier,
the first time those butterflies flutter
as he leans in and kisses you.
it feels like that weight
you didn’t notice flattening your chest
until your best friend stands up
and tells those bullies to fuck off.
it’s that moment,
either playing soccer
or singing on a stage,
when passion prevails your whole body.
it’s everywhere around us,
if you know where to look.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Lavender
2 years 10 months ago
a lovenote from the author
Greetings, Kira!
Yes, it's all of those things! A delightful poem - I felt the positive energy flow from each of the stanzas. Inviting title and theme, and great rhythm throughout.
Welcome to Neopoet!
Lavender
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 10 months ago
Welcome
I really like this. A very accurate and well written poem. Having spent a lot of time on the soccer fields and performing on stages your choices were pretty uncanny to me.
Welcome
Tim