Love's ghosts

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:

This poem captures a moment of recognition and wonder with a simple yet evocative narrative. The contrast between "skin dark as night but clear as day" is a striking image that invites reflection on perception and perhaps the complexity of identity or memory. However, the poem could benefit from tightening its rhythm and exploring more varied imagery to deepen emotional resonance. For example, the repeated phrase "stood right there in front of me" emphasizes the speaker's disbelief but might gain more impact if rephrased or paired with sensory details beyond sight—such as sound, scent, or touch—to create a fuller experience. Additionally, the phrase "beautiful child of Eve" is a classical allusion that grounds the poem in a universal human context, but expanding on what makes this figure unique or significant to the speaker could enhance the poem's intimacy. Overall, consider experimenting with line breaks and pacing to heighten the tension between recognition and disbelief, and explore metaphors that extend beyond visual description to enrich the poem's thematic depth.

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Hello, WA,

I feel the surprise element here.  I like the brevity - it seems the narrator is almost speechless.  I do wonder about her returned feelings.  "Fondly" is a bit lukewarm...

Thank you!

L