raj

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Lovestruck

Life was lived in moments
letting them slip
like sand through fingers
walking past them
leaving footprints
to be swept by a tide

little did the tide know
what those footprints had to say
the sand kept those secrets
till they wore away
like sea shells

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

Comments

scribbler

9 years 9 months ago

Hi raj

No chopped prose here!. In my opinion a most excellent free verse with good use of metaphor.......stan

raj

9 years 9 months ago

Thanks Stan for your time,

Thanks Stan for your time, visit and comment..

Regards,

lovedly

9 years 9 months ago

you are raj

just
A S T O U N D I N G

Rula

9 years 9 months ago

"little did the tide know

"little did the tide know
what those footprints had to say
the sand kept those secrets
till they wore away
like sea shells"

Raj, this is specially awesome!!
PS. Is Lovestruck one word?

raj

9 years 9 months ago

Thanks Rula for the time,

Thanks Rula for the time, visit, read and comment. Good to know you liked the second portion of verses...

Not sure if it should be Lovestruck or Love Struck or any other title..

Regards,

Rula

9 years 9 months ago

The title

can be anything you feel the poem conveys.

raj

9 years 9 months ago

Rula, I am still thinking

Rula, I am still thinking about a change in the title.

Regards,

Seren

9 years 4 months ago

little did I know

I was going to come across this

What beautiful freeverse I feel privelaged to read poetry this good and be lucky enough to be able to discuss it with the poet ..

This is profoundly good my friend .. such a pleasure to read ... sigh

Love Jayne x

raj

9 years 4 months ago

Hi Jayne

thanks for the read and your comment which will inspire me to write better...

Take good care..be well..

Much love and warm hugs...