The Lowest Pagoda

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Your poem "The Lowest Pagoda" evokes a sense of intimacy and spirituality through its imagery and language. The juxtaposition of lying beside a stranger in bed with the mantras of prayers and temple drums creates a vivid and intriguing contrast. The use of sensory details like "whining breaths" and "beating heart" adds depth to the scene you are portraying.

One suggestion for improvement could be to further develop the connection between the physical intimacy described in the first few lines and the spiritual elements introduced later in the poem. Exploring how these two aspects intersect and influence each other could enhance the overall impact of your poem. Additionally, consider refining the structure and flow of your poem to create a more cohesive narrative or emotional arc for the reader to follow.

Overall, your poem shows promise in its exploration of themes related to love, spirituality, and human connection. By delving deeper into the relationship between the physical and spiritual realms you have introduced, you can further enrich the depth and complexity of

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much love, Cat

as though you have found a new religion. [A new-old religion]. Maybe Hindu or Buddhism?
Intriguing, to say the least. ~ Geez.
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this line bothers me... It feels clunky:

"In her bed her (whining) breaths"

much love, Cat

the lack of punctuation makes the difference. Put a comma between bed and her and the pause makes it better. ~ Geez.
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