Lust

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:

This poem attempts to explore the complexities of lust, shame, and vulnerability. The opening lines present a universalizing claim about lust, positioning it as an inescapable and communal human experience. The language is direct, though the phrasing ("Not a soul is better than one another") is somewhat awkward and could benefit from revision for clarity and rhythm. The poem’s tone is confessional, with the speaker oscillating between personal admission and broader statements about humanity.

The poem’s structure is loosely organized, with short stanzas and lines that sometimes lack syntactic cohesion. For example, "They feels so good and their skin feels so tender and safe" contains a grammatical inconsistency ("They feels") that distracts from the intended intimacy. The poem would benefit from careful attention to pronoun agreement and tense consistency.

The emotional arc moves from avoidance and shame to reluctant acceptance, culminating in a prescriptive final line. The sequence, "The fear of humiliation, / The post clarity, / The shame that riddles you," gestures toward the aftermath of desire, but the language remains abstract. More concrete imagery or sensory detail could help ground the reader in the speaker’s experience.

The poem’s final lines shift from introspection to a universal declaration: "Everyone should experience sex at least once." This move risks flattening the complexity established earlier, as it imposes a normative statement that may not resonate with all readers. The poem might be strengthened by maintaining ambiguity or focusing on the speaker’s individual perspective rather than generalizing.

Overall, the poem raises interesting questions about desire and self-perception but would benefit from greater attention to language precision, imagery, and structural coherence.

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I think its an honest poem about not suppressing basic feelings, including lust which is part of manhood. Having good sex is healthy.  Thanks for share