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Jan 07, 2023
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This poem is part of the contest:
Neopoem Of The Week January 8th to January 14th 2023
The magic Of The Leaf
a leaf
fell once on
my chest while under
a tree I was taking a rest
It tickled a ripped-apart heart,
that's brimmed up with grief
in brief, never belittle
a fragile essence even
if a brittle
leaf
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Did you like my leaf-shaped poetry ?
Style/Type: Free verse
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 5 months ago
I loved it
This is so tender and real. The formatting is brilliant, not something I ever consider. Nice job throughout.
Tim
Rula
2 years 5 months ago
Hello Tim
It means a lot to know that you like it. It took a pretty good time to shape it and do all the alignment things and so, and I won't let the shape overtake the message between the lines.
Thank you for your time. Much appreciate it.
Candlewitch
2 years 5 months ago
dear Rula,
a perfect leaf shape! your wording is charming. but can you explain this line to me:
(a fragile ens even)
I don't understand this line.
thank you. and hugs, Cat
Rula
2 years 5 months ago
Thank you dearest Cat
I wanted ens as a lighter synonym for the word entity. I might not be the best choice. Any suggestions?
The over all meaning is not to belittle even tiny things or creatures
Candlewitch
2 years 5 months ago
maybe...
spirit, essence, soul, or being?
*hugs, Cat
Rula
2 years 5 months ago
Ens
Isn't a word that is usually used?
Rula
2 years 5 months ago
Thank you Cat. I took
Your suggestion with many thanks. Muchly appreciate it.
Candlewitch
2 years 5 months ago
sweet Rula,
you are very welcome!
*hugs, Cat
Michael Anthony
2 years 5 months ago
Loved this, thanks for
Loved this, thanks for sharing it. Big fan of poems that really distill feelings down to their bare esence yet say all that is needed to feel.
Best
Rula
2 years 5 months ago
Thank you Michael
It's always my pleasure. I really appreciate your kind visit. Your comment makes my day.
Lavender
2 years 5 months ago
Magic of the Leaf
Hello, Rula,
This is gorgeous - in shape and poetry. I especially love the way the final leaf rests on the ground. Beautiful.
L
Rula
2 years 5 months ago
Oh dear Lavender
I even like your comment more than my piece. You're so generous and kind.
Thank you for everything dear.
RoseBlack
2 years 5 months ago
Love
Everything about this including the creative formatting. You never fail to impress me with not only the elegance of your poems but how you are not afraid to try new things with them. Well done.