judyanne

Oct 16, 2015 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Magpie

In quiet, inactive tryst of early morning,
when yesterday's an echo through the mist
and Venus shimmers, swinging on sky's awning,
and shines with eye of one who's just been kissed,
the songster of the bush begins to warble
an aria of old, from Dreamtime's play,
that seems to mimic every human foible,
and signals us the coming of the day,

While fingered colours dance the old horizon
I smell and taste the early morning dew;
unravel bygone deeds that I have spun;
await the gold that births the world anew.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: In a real frump with my writing, so I decided to use October's competition as inspiration, even though I'm too late to enter........

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story

Comments

raj

9 years 8 months ago

Good to see you back Judyanne

Good to see you back Judyanne.

Regards,

judyanne

9 years 8 months ago

hi Raj

Thank you - lovely to see you too
love judy
xxx

wesley snow

9 years 8 months ago

Don't you dare enter this in the Nov. contest.

(If you were late, it doesn't count for Oct.). I'm going to participate and I can't beat you or Rula. I might beat Stan. We're about equal, but you guys scare me. Leave off and let me win.

I believe the term is "laugh out loud". Am I correct?

judyanne

9 years 8 months ago

lol

What a load of you-know-what Mr Snow....
love judy
xxx

emeka ozurumba

9 years 8 months ago

lovely methaphors

an exquisite write

judyanne

9 years 8 months ago

thank you emeka

for your very kind comments
love judy
xxx

Rula

9 years 8 months ago

beautiful

Roscoe Lane

9 years 8 months ago

Excellent,

Excellent, i liked this a lot. Love Roscoe..

lovedly

9 years 8 months ago

will Lovedly ever

will Lovedly ever
pole vault like you
in poetry, never
ere now I now slash
the waffle altogether
where can I come
for beautiful words to gather
coming off your poetic feather..
any surplus pack em together
with folded hand
I here stand

Sparrow

9 years 8 months ago

Judy

Mr Snow has conceded, we shall have to find a short month for him to enter, so that we can have a rest and let him win.
We could pretend and ask Stan to send him an arrowhead or two, or one of those gadgets for taking stones out of horses hooves, LOL Lot of learning ???
Loved this write and he is so right about its superior quality,
the title threw me a little as a magpie here is a cackling annoyance and steals shinny things maybe yours sing, ours haven't learned that yet??
Take care young lady, know we think of you,
Yours as always, Ian, Anne, and the Children xx

judyanne

9 years 3 months ago

rula, roscoe, loved, ian

Thanks all for the read and comments
sorry for the very late acknowledgement

Ian - i don't find the magpie's song at all annoying - they really can warble ... and they are wonderful mimics
perhaps you're correct - maybe the aussie maggies have learned to sing better due to our wonderful wide open space as opposed to the cramped heavy trod air of England
(Lol)

Love judy
xxx