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May 23, 2025
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Mama mia
Mama mia
Don't worry
I will get by with little
Money
Also I spend my money
Wisely
Yes I am always streching
My money
And that is a very hard thing to do
I have my style of clothes
And second hand clothes
Are my style
Everybody tells me
That the clothes I wear is garbage
They don't know how much
They hurt me so much
About This Poem
Last Few Words: That is a new poem Of mine I written by me A few days ago
Style/Type: Free verse
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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
Consider clarifying the central emotional focus of the poem. Currently, the shift from the speaker's reassurance ("Don't worry") to the hurt caused by others' comments ("They hurt me so much") is abrupt. Expanding on the emotional transition could provide greater depth and coherence. Additionally, the repetition of the word "money" might benefit from variation or more vivid imagery to enhance the reader's engagement. The lines about second-hand clothing effectively convey vulnerability; consider elaborating on this theme to further strengthen the emotional resonance.
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