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The Map of Scars
What a horrendous experience I encountered as a child.
My beloved pet named Fe Fe met his horrifying death.
Fe Fe was my cherished kitty.
He played with me. He let me dress him up and roll him around in my doll buggy. I loved Fe Fe.
It had been cold and raining for weeks and I missed Fe Fe .
It was a day after school, my friend hollering at me to go upon our deck to our swimming pool.
To my surprise there was Fe Fe. laying in the cold water lifeless.
I cried and screamed.
Fe Fe had scratched the side of the liner in desperation, trying to escape his dismiss.
When my Mother returned home she reached Fe Fe and wrapped him up.
It was pouring rain but we had a funeral for Fe Fe.
We buried him outside my bedroom window.
Fe Fe rest in peace. I will always remember and love you.
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