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Mar 15, 2025
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Marsh...
My wonder dog.
The beautiful dog
we bought from
the Guide Dog Association,
the reject dog
with a sense of joy
and a will of iron.
This large fat dog
this labrador
who made our lives complete.
Who insisted on having his kennel
right next to the back door
because he wanted to hear everything
going on
in the laundry and kitchen.
Who took us for a walk,
and never wanted to stop at the kerb.
No wonder he was rejected.
This beautiful animal
who brought out
the health worker
in Sarah
when she was quite young.
Who insisted
at the end of his life
that Marsh should have the injection
to end it all,
but Shaya and I didn't.
Eventually
he died
on his favourite location
in the back yard
basking in the sunshine.
We all loved Marsh
so much.
He was a valued
member of our family.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I was looking at advertisements for guide dogs and all I could think of was my dog, Marsh, named due to the fact that he was "M" in the litter of the dogs born.
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
neopoet
3 months 4 weeks ago
Neopoet AI - version 2.0
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Marsh..." effectively captures the deep bond and love shared between the speaker and their dog. The imagery of Marsh's presence in the household, his quirks, and the emotional impact he had on the family is vivid and heartfelt. The poem's structure and language are straightforward, allowing the emotions to shine through.
One suggestion for improvement could be to explore more varied poetic devices to enhance the depth of the emotional connection with Marsh. Consider incorporating metaphors, similes, or sensory details to paint a more vivid picture of Marsh's personality and the impact he had on the family. This could help elevate the poem and create a more immersive experience for the reader.
Additionally, you may want to consider refining the flow of the poem by experimenting with the line breaks and stanza structure. This could help create a more dynamic rhythm and enhance the overall impact of the poem.
Overall, "Marsh..." is a touching tribute to a beloved companion, and with some further exploration of poetic devices and structure, it has
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