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Jul 14, 2021
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Maslows slippery slope.
Desire-
is a plump
fickle comely
wench; Want- is but
a breakfast in bed, Need-
is a dump a pee and a trump
and a bint with a bodkin and thread.
Obi.
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Geezer
4 years ago
This is...
how I see this one:
Desire-
is a plump
fickle, comely
wench; Want is but
a breakfast in bed, Need-
is a dump, a pee and a trump
and a bint [what is a bint?] with a bodkin and thread.
~ Geezer.
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Triskelion
4 years ago
I got everything
..but a "trump" although "pump" would work okay for me in it's place.
Your entertaining rhyme is kind of like a limerick and has a similar bounce. Is there a name for the form?
Thomas
Obadiah Grey
4 years ago
Hiya chaps,
Hiya chaps,
geez, a "bint" is British slang for woman,,, (not a nice word really).
Trisk. perhaps "pump" would work better, thanks for that.
The form was originally a pyramid to echo the work of (psycobabbylist) Maslow's hierarchy of needs, represented as a pyramid with the more basic needs at the bottom, though, the forum won't let me post it that way, so, slippery slope it is!
Cheers lads. Obi.
lovedly
3 years 12 months ago
how I knew Maslow
Quench your thirst
first
settle your stomach 'next
have energy
then SEX (AS YOU SAY WITH A BINT)
and
POWER
have no limit
stretch it as much may be
it's elastic only
will revert gradually
BUT SLOWLY
take it easy
lol
Obadiah Grey
3 years 12 months ago
LOL. Nice one!
LOL. Nice one!
lovedly
3 years 11 months ago
Thanks OBI
for your niceee
appreciationay
like Charodnay
lol