Mawkish+true

You hurt me.
You forgot,
I am someone.
Someone's daughter.
Someone's mother.
Someone's child.
Someone's legacy.

I sat in the sun
And felt my skin burn
I remembered
How it feels:
I am corporeal
I hurt
I exist
I pee
I cry
I bleed

You cannot erase me!

I nourish

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Country/Region: ZAF

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neopoet

9 months 1 week ago

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Geezer

9 months 1 week ago

I felt the emotional cry here; I'm not sure of the circumstances, but I can see you sitting on the beach, waiting for your date; who said they would bring the picnic lunch, a blanket and drinks. He never shows up! I get the shout, "You cannot erase me!" However, the last line has me baffled. ~ Geez.
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kowque

7 months 3 weeks ago

There was no beach

This was a childish cry. Thank you

Leslie

9 months ago

Mawkish+true

I thought that this was honest and true. Two qualities that partially make you,you. You cannot be erased , you've written your soul on neo. You most definately do nourish all who know you!