scribbler

May 28, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

MAY FLURRY

Not too long after day's sunrise
this morning at the end of May
came a warm pleasant surprise
nature chanced to send my way

As I sat and looked around
there came with breeze a tiny flurry
flakes of white swirled to the ground
and frosted it in quite a hurry

Beneath a large wild cherry tree
shedding tiny petals to the wind
a snapshot seen by only me
ten minutes time from start to end

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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Comments

scribbler

14 years 1 month ago

Hi Jayne

I knew I would have to write of this as soon as it happened. Still don't think I got it quite right. Thank you for visiting, always nice to see your smiling face..............stan

scribbler

14 years 1 month ago

hi Rose

We get enough snow to enjoy it but not so much as to become a burden. So seeing a "flurry" of petals falling through warm spring air was quite a site. Thank you for coming by and leaving such kind comment......stan

scribbler

14 years 1 month ago

Hmmmm....

you realize the "snow" referred to here was a flurry of wild cherry blossom petals falling to and covering the ground?.....................stan

scribbler

14 years 1 month ago

rose

whenever clarity is lacking
I feel the writer must be slacking..........lol............stan

raj

14 years 1 month ago

Hi Stan

as is your forte you create such lovely images and moods with your words..perhaps you would like to tweak the last stanza ...

regards...

scribbler

14 years 1 month ago

Hi raj

I am always tweaking my stuff and since I'm not really happy with this I'm sure last stanza will be nudged along with the rest of it. It was good of you to drop by and leave a suggestion..............stan

Rottiestyl

14 years 1 month ago

It's always been a sad thing

It's always been a sad thing for me to watch a leaf fall. Somehow, making me mad that it's short life is over but if admired for only a brief moment I suppose it is well worth the loss. On a lighter side, the cottonwood tree really pisses me off sometimes. It just covers everything! Always waiting till just after the lawn is mowed and the weeds are pulled. Nature has always had a sense a humor to me. Great piece Stan.

Kim
(V)

scribbler

14 years 1 month ago

hi Kim

No cottonwoods around here, but we have this innocuous little vine called kudzu lol. I am glad you enjoyed my little attempt...............stan