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McD's
The logistics of the
2-lane drive-thru
line at McDonald's
is a fairly simple concept
learned by most 4-year olds:
his turn, her turn,
my turn, your turn.
After the car in lane 2
ordered his McSomething,
he moved up a bit.
I ordered a small half-cut iced tea.
I moved up a bit.
Apparently the two grown men-children
two cars back in both lanes
wanted to fight for that prized
1-car length advantage
to get to the window
to grab their mouthwatering
unhappy meals.
There were threats,
there was foul language
that did not follow the
McTheme of it all.
Tense moments that
soured the half-sweetness
of my tea.
Where, oh where is Ronald when you need him?
If we cannot play well together,
we are all McDoomed.
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About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Lavender
4 years 4 months ago
Hi, Teddy
Poor Ronald!
Thank you!
L
Ray Whitaker
4 years 4 months ago
Funny!
I could see the whole scene, such great descriptors... the tongue in cheek bits are really great!
Lavender
4 years 4 months ago
Hi, Ray
Thank you very much for reading and commenting!
L
lovedly
4 years 4 months ago
I love off beat poemies
as I love McD
mostly apple pies
chips fried and choco what
icecream
our kids behave don't scream
for most kid owners
we r a rare dream
r they blind
so it seems
they ask me
LAVE
we all from kids learn
could thee
okay we
Lavender
4 years 4 months ago
Hello, Lovedly
Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts!
L
lovedly
4 years 4 months ago
Yeah be creative
a boiled egg before I eat it
I compose poetry
how it was boiled
for me
Geezer
4 years 4 months ago
I'm a BK-man...
myself, but I do like the filet of fish sandwich. Yeah, Mc D's is not any different than any other place these days. Ronnie is recovering nicely and should be back on the job soon. Of course, those people that are scared of clowns; can't stomach him!
Funny stuff! ~ Geez.
.
Lavender
4 years 4 months ago
Hi, Geezer
Ha ha! I fear Ronald may need to start wearing armor! But you are right, unfortunately it is everywhere.
Thank you!
L
scribbler
4 years 4 months ago
Some Mcpeople
lose their Mcminds in the Mcdrive through .......of course their tiny minds are easy to misplace lol
Lavender
4 years 4 months ago
Hi, Stan
That's a good way to look at it - they've simply lost their minds.
Thank you!
L