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Kailashana2
Jun 15, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

meditation

it is morning
the night not yet
ascended

in the ocean
whale song
and the river
breathes

there is madness
and survival
death and Afghanistan

I meditate on these things,
life turns over another
page

Love,
You are here with me

the peonies burst with flame.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=j0gC4SH1Bqk

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Ohio, USA

Favorite Poets: Bokonon: “Let your life be the poem you write”. , I'm still writing.....

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K

Kailashana2

14 years 1 month ago

Thanks dear for your

Thanks dear for your suggestions and reading, but this poem stays as is.

The whale song reverberates, it's a given that whales singing is the cause.

I spoke of 4 separate things in stanza 3.... madness. survival. death and Afghanistan

I rarely use connecting words in the last sentence such as as. ;-) They stand on their own.

All is well in Oz this morning (for me)?

~

K

Kailashana2

14 years 1 month ago

Wellllll....missy!

Wellllll....missy!

You might have given me suggestions that I *would have used*....lol.

Hugs,
~

weirdelf

weirdelf

14 years 1 month ago

oh Anna!

I do not think I have ever seen you make a change to a poem based on feedback. That should make make you my automatic enemy on Neopoet.

You are an arrogant bitch, but a fucking good arrogant bitch. Nee, a lioness.

loved

loved

14 years 1 month ago

LOVELY FINALE FOR A MEDITATION

I meditate on these things,
life turns over another
page

Another occasion
for a fresh meditation
life churns
and turns
to return

loved

loved

14 years 1 month ago

death is no

panacea

fighting for ones right
in this one and only life
gives more pleasure

death is exhaustion
extinction
like eusthania

K

Kailashana2

14 years 1 month ago

Indeed. the spirit is

Indeed. the spirit is willing but the flesh is weak. ;-) I often think, that we are immortal beings and we have programmed ourselves for death until we get the *living* part right.

What do you think?

~A

loved

loved

14 years 1 month ago

GIVE ME TIME

To think
then i will say

Engineered

Heredity
or over ruling
all in its entirety

we live but one life
singularly
so let me be
MEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
INDIVIDUALLY
HOPEFULLY
AND
WILFULLY