Memories Flow Back Too

I go back,
Sometimes it’s filled with pain,
I go back,
Nothing will be the same,
Precious places
I first knew,
When life and youth
And love were new,
I flow back,
Memories flow back too.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Country/Region: London Metropolitan Area.

Favorite Poets: William Shakespeare, John Keats, Samuel Taylor Coleridge, Percy Bysshe Shelley, Oscar Wilde, John Berryman.

Comments

Geezer

4 years 10 months ago

A somber...

piece of work to start the day. Not free verse though. The rhyme stands out. I think that maybe you should look at deleting the word [though]. It kind of makes a stutter in the first lines. I would say that you should put it at the head of the second line, but then it makes it look awkward. I think it better to get rid of it. I like it just as much and it doesn't change the meaning any.
As always, it's your work and yours to do with what you will. I am not the know-all here. See what other people think. ~ Geez.
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Carl Halling

4 years 10 months ago

I took it out, and 'cos, and 'and' too...

It looks good, I have to say, thanks for that, Geezer. I do think this improves the piece to remove 'though', ''cos' and 'and'. Much appreciated.

Geezer

4 years 10 months ago

Two...

thumbs up! Ypou are right, it sounds much better. Glad to help. ~ Geez.
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Carl Halling

4 years 10 months ago

Hi Teddy...

I'm so pleased you like it, yes, both from London, born and bred, me. Geezer gave me some great advice, I tried it, and liked what I saw. I am with you there, it is great to learn, there is always more to know in the poetry game, I love it all. Bye for now. Carl.

scribbler

4 years 10 months ago

Well I disagree with Geeze (not that rare a thing lol).

I don't think a few rhymes preclude a poem from being free verse. Indeed I have been saying here for years that hybrid poetry like this might be the direction in which poetry is heading. I have no suggestions for improvement (and Thai is a bit rare lol)

Carl Halling

4 years 10 months ago

Hi Scribbler

It does seem that way, although whether that is a good thing or not is down to the individual.