Unca Fez

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02/24 Under The Influence

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Memories of Timothy Leary

Little white pill, so innocent in my palm.
Momentary doubt, to take it or not.
Messages of doom rattle in my brain.
Shoving them aside, down it goes.

Anxious to see where it will lead,
Waiting, waiting, no sign of a change.
Someone walks ’cross the dimly lit room,
Echoes of light shadow behind them.

The music stops. The record changes.
Santana "Abraxas" blares from the speakers.
The music breeds a wild panic within.
Desperation! Escape! Reject the record.

“In Search of the Lost Chord” calms the fear.
From somewhere a set of headphones appear.
Listen in rapture to their strange new sounds,
As the various pieces move from ear to ear.

Hours later, a noticeable gnawing grows.
The desire to stimulate palate and tongue.
What, pray tell, is the perfect snack?
We debate as the checkout clerk frowns.

With dawn comes exhaustion to one and all.
The light shadows fade. The room less intense.
After fourteen hours of sensory strangeness,
We crash in our beds, our sleep, dreamless.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: This is a composite of some of the clearer memories that I have from the late 60's through early 70's experiments with hallucinogens while I was at the University of Wisconsin. Much of what I remember is just a collection of feelings. I can safely say that I would not have wanted to try this later in my life.

Style/Type: Free verse

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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Wisconsin, USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Candlewitch: I've been reading her poetry for over forty years., Paul Simon: "The Sounds of Silence" got me interested, but "Patterns" and "A Poem On The Underground Wall" really hooked me., Gordon Lightfoot: I acquired his "Sundown" album while in the Navy. "Circle of Steel" resonated with me and I have been an avid fan since.

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neopoet

1 year 4 months ago

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The poem "Memories of Timothy Leary" effectively uses sensory details to create an immersive experience for the reader. The use of imagery, such as "Echoes of light shadow behind them," and "The music breeds a wild panic within," paints a vivid picture and evokes strong emotions.

However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent rhythm and meter. The varying line lengths and syllable counts can disrupt the flow of the poem, making it less engaging for the reader. Experimenting with a more consistent structure could enhance the overall impact of the poem.

Additionally, the poem could explore its themes more deeply. While the sensory experiences are well-described, the poem could delve further into the emotional and psychological effects of these experiences. This could provide a more nuanced exploration of the poem's themes and create a more engaging and thought-provoking piece.

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RoseBlack

1 year 4 months ago

A "trip"

Down memory lane. Sounds like you have some fond memories of your time with Timothy Leary. I enjoyed how this takes the reader on the journey from start to finish. Well done.

Unca Fez

1 year 4 months ago

I Don't Know If All Of Them Are Fond

I don't know if all of them are fond. I managed to escape without experiencing any flashbacks as some of my friends did. There were other incidents similar to the "Abraxas" verse that were definitely not fun. However, that is where I found my love of the Moody Blues after they got "weird".

Thanks for reading and the kind comments. Always appreciated.

RoseBlack

1 year 4 months ago

Nights in white satin

Is my favorite love song. I don't have many but I love this one.

Unca Fez

1 year 4 months ago

Seventh Sojourn - For My Lady

Of all their music that can be considered a love song, "For My Lady" from the Seventh Sojourn album is my favorite.

Lavender

1 year 4 months ago

Memories of Timothy Leary

Hello, Steve,
So much here! I feel the anxiety, and see the "echos of light" (great poetry). You take the reader along on your trip. Your title, blended with your ingenious music references bring a big smile. Quite the time!
Thank you!
L

Unca Fez

1 year 4 months ago

Thank you!

Thanks for the read and kind words. I don't often think about those nights much any more. They kind of feel like someone else's memories, but it was kind of fun trying to fit them into something that might be entertaining.

Lavender

1 year 4 months ago

Truly clever

to tie it all together with a Timothy Leary "experience."
L

Candlewitch

1 year 4 months ago

Dearest,

at least it was your choice to "step off the ledge" It seems like I just have to do things, "the hard way!" I wonder why that is? Do I have a "Kick Me!" sign on my back?

I wish you included your selection of snacks and the discovery of new taste sensations.

"A question Of Balance" was mine. The question, Dawning Is The Day and Minstrel's Song

*hugs, Cat

Unca Fez

1 year 4 months ago

It Is A Shame...

It is a shame that your introduction was involuntary and involved viewing "The Exorcist" for the first time. I can't imagine a worse scenario.

Thanks for reading and commenting.

Candlewitch

1 year 4 months ago

But...

I got even with her...I remained calm and she was the one freaking-out!

Geezer

1 year 4 months ago

Thanks for...

the risk-free trip, man! I enjoyed it enough to read it through a number of times, before deciding that there was nothing I could add or comment to in this one. So, you simply have my gratitude for this piece. I had my own experiences, but I will save them for another time. ~ Geez.
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Unca Fez

1 year 4 months ago

Glad You Enjoyed It!

I'm not sure what prompted me to write this, but it was interesting to try to describe some of the things that I remembered.

Candlewitch

9 months ago

!

a mistake, sorry

Clentin

9 months ago

Never had such an experience

Never had such an experience but did communicate with those who have.
Great poem

Unca Fez

9 months ago

Thank you!

Thank you for reading. The poem is a collage of several "trips" from my first four years at the University of Wisconsin in Madison. Fifty years out, the memories tend to blur together.