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Mesmeric Scapes

perched atop a tree
a falcon spreads its wings
ready to migrate

sunlight bursts through clouds
sipping dew drops on roses
kissing them awake

the shepherd is out
herding his flock of sheep
towards the pastures

a chameleon
camouflages dubiously
to pounce on his prey

like a Sage in trance
a lotus floats serenely
calming the ripples

a lone butterfly
flutters its colorful wings
in search of its mate

a gentle breeze plays
a melodious rhyme
on my window chimes

a dawning day paints
these mesmerizing landscapes
on my window pane

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

Comments

Kailashana2

14 years ago

ok, this is wonderful Raj,

ok, this is wonderful Raj, absolutely delightful, deliciously so! .... now do you have a princess to kiss you?

smile.

(Haikuesque is the spelling I use for my Haikuesque poems).

raj

14 years ago

Thank you Anna for the read

Thank you Anna for the read and your comment..

initially i had indeed chosen Haikuesque for a title but then changed it to Astounding to express how astounded i was to see the glorious events of at dawn causing the "frog leap from bed"..for a humorous anti climax...lol...as for the Princess its a nice wishful thinking lol..

loved

14 years ago

Is it all about*

I frog leaped from bed
my pajamas.....
in a heap
around my ankles

*MORNING WOOD.....
AND
THE ineveyable FALL
SOME VIRGIN
AWAITING YOUR CALL
My Dear RAI,
U R IN LOVE AFTER ALL!!!!!

raj

14 years ago

Loved

thanks for the read and your humorous perception..lol..

loved

14 years ago

I APPRECIATE THAT YOU DO APPRECIATE

AFTER THE LAST POETRY SESSION
OF WHAT WAS THAT..... CLICHES KIND
I SAW YOUR ....
xxxxxpppp... in the form of a frog
jumping the confines of prison walls....
i do hope u didn't mind
and still kept it under control....
well defined and confined

loved

14 years ago

WHO ELSE SAW YOUR FROG LEAP?????

UREMAINED SILENT
ND MADE ME WEEP
I READ UR FROGGY POEM AGAIN
RAJ UR POETRY IS A TREAT
AS MUCH AS MINE IS
A RETREAT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

mand

14 years ago

Hi Raj

These Haikus are wonderful. My favorites - all of them, so delightful and peaceful to read.

Thank you for sharing your observation and serenity and shaping it into something wonderful.

Love Mand xxxxxx

raj

14 years ago

Mand its is good of you to

Mand its is good of you to visit these Haikus ..glad to know it created a feeling of serenity...which in fact is the theme of these mesmeric moments....

much love..

raj

14 years ago

You did see the frog leap?.

You did see the frog leap?..lol...i thought it was too much of an anti climax so i made the frog leap outta of the way....thanks for the read and comment...

raj

14 years ago

Ian..

i must say you have made a hilarious limerick out of the mouse that went missing from my write..i am glad that it got into your head :)...

cheers..

raj

14 years ago

Ian

even if it is not yours thankls for sharing this song..it is hilarious..i wasn;t in the know of it..

cheers..

raj

13 years 12 months ago

Thanks Ian for this update on

Thanks Ian for this update on the song...

magics02

14 years ago

Ocean

I regret not visiting you and I am glad I did this evening. This is vivid to me and I wish there was a picture to go with it. Well wait a minute there is. In my mind I seen this and I heard it and it was just grand. Your poetry has taken on a life of its own and I admire you for it.

Great job
Blessings
Mona

raj

14 years ago

Dearest Mona

thank you for the read and your comment...nice to know you enjoyed it...

much love..

scribbler

14 years ago

hi raj

Here was old denseness having to have mand point out this was a Haiku series lol. And they were most descriptive also. Had you considered writing another to use at end that would supply a completion to the thoughts? Of course this might just be my weary eyes not seeing..............stanPS in my opinion a haiku series that reads well as a poem is quite a good thing

raj

14 years ago

Hi Stan

thank you for the read and comment...yes..i knew that there was a missing link and i have now spruced it up with addition of a couple of more stanzas for bringing about..as rightly suggested by you "completion to the thoughts"...

CCfire

14 years ago

This made me want to be

This made me want to be inside this painting of a day and it's characters. It immerses the reader to be right there and seeing it all unfold.

raj

14 years ago

Chez

thanks for the read and your comment...it makes my day when accomplished writers like you visit my page and find this worthy of a read...

weirdelf

14 years ago

Read as a series of haikus, this really works.

Read as a complete poem it is rather cliched and a tad empty.

Does this tell us something about form and meaning?

raj

14 years ago

Jess

it is an attempt to express the good things many of us tend to miss out in the largely material world...thank you for the read ....it is appreciated..

raj

14 years ago

Hi Chrys

thank you for the read and the comment...good to know it did bring about a calming effect....some find it effective while others find it empty... but that's understandable given the diversity of thoughts and appeal...

what is new in Olympic Pool workshop?...

loved

14 years ago

where did the frog vanish???

back homewards??
who asked you to castrate it
the frog ...added natural beauty
a combined version of man with nature
never listen to anyone
in such matters t
he original charm is lost....Raj

pleiades

14 years ago

raj, there is a lovely

raj, there is a lovely serenity about this poem

as i began to read, i felt no need to view it
from a critique stand-point...rather, i was very
content to simply lose myself in the imagery
your words presented

peaceful
calm
content

very lovely raj

a real pleasure to read

cheers
p

raj

14 years ago

Hi Pleiades

good to see you visit my page ..thanks for the read and comment...happy to know you enjoyed the tranquility of dawn and the imagery...

Candlewitch

14 years ago

Dear raj,

I didn't see the leaping frog :( somehow I missed it, LOL! But these are wonderful little glimpses into life.

always, Cat

loved

14 years ago

SORRY FOR MY BUTTing in

Please ask him to repeat those lines,
It was a wonderful thought,
A comparison of animal with human domain,
The frog in ones masculinity
In the privacy of inner prison does remain
A cliché of a kind does sustain
His wish,
The frog well let Raj’s words reign

raj

14 years ago

Dearest Cat...

Congratulations on your workshop poems deservedly getting published in the July Newsletter...many would be able to read and appreciate it...

thank you for the read and your appreciative comments...

Oh! the Frog was a humorous end piece i had initially posted to express my amazement at the tranquil mood and the beautiful images created at dawn...which read something like this:

I frog leaped from bed
my pajamas dropping down
around my ankles

but i dropped this stanza because i thought it quite an anti climax disturbing the tranquility...lol...

much love..

loved

14 years ago

Frog leaped from bed

Frog leaped from bed
My pajamas dropping down
Around my ankles........................................

If I was you and proud of my

FROG, IN THE CONTAINS
AS MORNING WOOD

That the FROG daily maintains
I would release the frog,
From its prison walls and free it
Like any one would
And
Let it hop as we all do
And
Tranquilly those who haven't such a frog,
Would you woo.....

Place it back and restore the poor frog
And
More will love it of that I'm sure
But
RAJ IF NONE ELSE does hold
YOUR HAND,
I will do for sure.
Hello ole frog now come and play,
The sun is sunnier, today
Than twas yesterday

Candlewitch

14 years ago

Dear raj,

Thanks for clearing that up, :) LOL!

always, Cat

loved

14 years ago

DEAR RAJ

See how a cliche helped
a DIM WIT LIKE, LOVED
AND THE FROG IS STILL....
LEAPING BACK AND FORTH
AND
SO MANY POEMS HAVE BEEN CAST
THANK GOD
THE POETRYCLASSES
HAVE BEEN SO VAST

Barbara Writes

13 years 12 months ago

Hey Raj

this is just a beautiful poem. i see why you have 34 comment.

raj

13 years 12 months ago

Hi Barbara

thank you for the read and your appreciative comment...don't go by the numbers of comments..half are perhaps my responses to those who cared to stop by for a read...

your signature line talks about workshops but i believe there are no workshops going around right now..are they?...please let me know if there are..to my knowledge all have completed their course..

loved

13 years 11 months ago

i liked u for

ignoring all my comments
but still i obseve
u haven't done after that last one
twas eras,nay aeons ago
when next friend ???
will come another fall
anxiously awaiting ittttttttt
twas only one frog after all

Barbara Writes

13 years 10 months ago

You are something else

Having difficulty right now. So I can't comment as I usually do but will be back on track soon. Trying to get use to these two new classes so I can set a study plan that will help me pass. With the grades I would like. Nothing less than a "A" I am on here trying to stay on top of where neopoet is at the moment. Bear with me.

Thank you for responding and letting me know how you feel. Sometimes I don't understand what it is you mean and I tend to procrastinated as to not offend when I am not sure how to respond To things

Much love Neopoet Friend
Barbara

raj

13 years 10 months ago

Dear Barbara

my very best wishes to you for success in your exams...

much love...

raj

13 years 10 months ago

Hi Rosina

thanks for the read and your appreciative comment...

much love..