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brittle light
brittle light
Mar 17, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Messy As Hell

.
earth
still juvenile
with its volcanic complexion
shimmy-shakey dances
huff 'n puffin' ways
thrashing
pounding
explosive
tantrums

Mother earth?

more like
a rude little twirp

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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

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Region, Country: upstate New York USA, USA

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

14 years 4 months ago

Hello,

I like the style in which this little piece (with big meaning) is composed. My favorite lines are:

Mother earth?

more like
a rude little twirp

whimsey on a serious subject. I like it!

always, Cat

brittle light

brittle light

14 years 4 months ago

hello Cat

thanks for taking the time to comment. I do appreciate it very much.

Blue_Halcyon

Blue_Halcyon

14 years 4 months ago

You know,

I've thought of earth's eruptions and earthquakes as an attempt to shake us parasites off. We're destroying the earth, and it's only trying to defend itself. ;-)

brittle light

brittle light

14 years 4 months ago

hi

Thanks for your thoughts. My thoughts on the matter: no matter what we humans do, the earth will regenerate itself, although we will probably not be around to witness that glorious time

K

Kailashana2

14 years 4 months ago

However, awareness was here

However, awareness was here from the beginning, will always be reforming itself into the reality appearing...

I'm not sure humans are the epitome of consciousness, though I feel that we're still going through birth pangs.

Cool poem. Hot topic. ;-)

~A

S

scribbler

14 years 4 months ago

hello

I liked this. It's a good thing the earth is still a child as its burps are our atmosphere lol..................scribbler