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Feb 14, 2025
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Microwave
I love my microwave
so beautifully balanced
on the top
of my large black bar fridge.
I had a large
brown
microwave
previously.
Shaya and I
bought it
at a garage sale
not far
from where I used to live.
After about
twelve years
it eventually
stopped working.
We replaced it
with a black microwave
which we bought
at JB Hi Fi
in Camberwell.
Shaya
measured the space,
researched the capacity
and we went there together
and bought it.
It was the last appliance
ever
that we bought together.
Every time
I look at it
and use it
I am reminded of this.
And I smile.
It is a good memory
for me.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: There are some items in your house/apartment that hold special memories. This microwave holds only good memories for me, because I went shopping with Shaya to replace the non-functioning one we had previously. He always made a purchase of any item a long and fun experience. He loved going shopping with me. Charles add another story about this microwave. He was so kind and caring when I needed it the most. He and Faye measured the space so that I could have my small microwave placed above the large bar fridge.
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
neopoet
4 months 3 weeks ago
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Microwave" provides a glimpse into a personal memory associated with an appliance. The narrative style of the poem effectively conveys the sentimental value attached to the microwave. However, there are areas where the poem could be strengthened.
1. **Imagery and Descriptive Language**: The poem could benefit from more vivid imagery and descriptive language to enhance the reader's connection to the memory being shared. Adding sensory details or specific visual descriptions could make the scene more engaging.
2. **Structure and Pacing**: Consider playing with the structure and pacing of the poem to create a more dynamic flow. Breaking up the lines or stanzas differently could add variety and impact to the narrative.
3. **Theme Development**: While the poem captures a specific memory associated with the microwave, exploring deeper themes or emotions related to this memory could add layers of complexity to the piece. Delving into the significance of the appliance as a symbol of a shared experience could enrich the overall message.
By incorporating these suggestions
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kowque
4 months 3 weeks ago
12 years?!?!?!?
Longer than my previous marriage.
Beautiful piece.
The Gogetter
4 months 3 weeks ago
Response to Koki
That pre-loved microwave did last for twelve years. It was such a wonderful brown colour too. It suited the kitchen in my home. One of those purchases we could not resist, and it was well worth it.