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Apr 30, 2015
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Midnight Mission
The bathroom quest in the wee hours
not to be taken lightly.
No lights please!
An attempt to preserve what’s
left of my retinas.
I feel my way out of bed and along the walls to
that porcelain oasis in the night.
Then "Eureka" and a sigh of relief.
Mission accomplished!
Dry feet an indication of accuracy within
a qualifying standard.
But daylight inspection will be
the better judge of marksmanship.
And now to retrace those careful
steps to that waiting bed
About This Poem
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Comments
judyanne
10 years 2 months ago
know the feeling
Lol - except for the missing the porcelain bit.....
Definitely the no lights thing - I actually keep my eyes closed :)
So annoying that increased need for the bathroom in the middle of the night as we get old lol
a fun write
love judy
xxx
raj
10 years 2 months ago
a fun write for sure ..making
a fun write for sure ..making the reader walk the way to & fro...
emeka ozurumba
10 years 2 months ago
beautiful
you know that word beauty is ban, or hated in some places, so I'll give this more than beauty , let me say inanimate, is this not beauties forlorn name --to come?