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Might as Well Be You

I want to make it big
I want to be the best
I want to wind up on top
I need to pass the test

But it's tough to get people to notice
It's so hard to get exposure
When someone else gets the prize you earned
It's difficult to find any closure

It's hard when you are overlooked
But this is my advice to you
Be so loud they can't see past your light
Make some noise and do what you gotta do

And at the end of the day
When all is finished and through
Someone's gonna set this world on fire
And It Might as Well Be You

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I'd like some advice on whether I should rearrange the wording on my work. Feel free to give your opinion!

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Comments

Rula

2 years 7 months ago

One good rant

we always need to speak loud, otherwise many human rights will be overlooked.
Well put indeed

Shelby Pryor

2 years 7 months ago

Rula

Thank you! And yes, we can't allow people to overlook us. Thanks for the comment!

Lavender

2 years 7 months ago

Might As Well Be You

Hello, Shelby,
I've read this out loud several times - it has great rhyme and rhythm. I don't know that I'd change anything. The message is clear and direct, and full of wisdom. Very nice!
Thank you,
Lavender