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Mar 28, 2016
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Mind Stimulation
Mind stimulation
Being able to get to know what's deep within
buried below what the naked eye can see
flowing in and around the body like blood
connecting on an intellectual basis
more erotic than the physical
running far deeper and beyond than any penetration
exploring and traveling through my mind like
you've been there before creating a bond within the souls like no other where not many person's can go so why not get to know the inside instead of just looking at the outside
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Esker
8 years 9 months ago
gods and godesses
of the past were the most messed up of
gods and godesses
and of course they fell in love with mortals
loving what was inside...creativity
impish and carnal want
thrill of the deal then
we exist in our immediate society today
immediate hit drugs
immediate fix
immediate
satisfaction
like drowning that
want...
loving the inside is an
art...so many loathe
themselves and
are belittled by so
many others for
faults....How we get
controlled by others
if they are real
pick them apart
and here them
whine...No they
are good givers
and poor recievers
Beauty is good
nothing wrong with
looks
but there is even
greater lasting and
wonderful depths
too loving the person
for what they are
that strength like
a vein of gold or
spring of water too
refresh lasts!!
and worth more!
thank U!