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Feb 16, 2013
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Mindless
I reminisce to only think never this
The loneliness
Accompanied by the moans and whisps
Of revenge sexing me
A drinking binge investment treats
Every wound. Frees
The thoughts of feeling doomed, weak
Spineless. Unkindness
Reveals every moment to be timeless
And a man prone to be mindless
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
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Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
Frenchf
12 years 5 months ago
Short and pithy
Captured a vision