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Depressed 1
Depressed 1
Nov 12, 2022 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
This poem is part of the workshop:

Euphonious English Workshop Part #1

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A Miracle In Breath

I see a miracle everywhere I look

In every flower and every brook

I see it in every tree growing tall

I hear it in every bird as it calls

I feel it deep in every breath

I see it in every birth and death

It is miraculous every night; I survive

It is miraculous every day; I am alive

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Southwest United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allen Poe, Jim Morrison, Sylvia Plath

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

2 years 8 months ago

Yes...

I feel a miracle here. I am so glad that you have found somewhere to be, a place that values you. Keep writing, we will keep reading. ~ Geezer.
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RoseBlack

RoseBlack

2 years 8 months ago

Yes!

This was absolutely fantastic and I think my favorite piece by you to date. I love how your perspective has shifted in this write and you have found something positive in every day! So glad you found your home here on Neo!

Depressed 1

Depressed 1

2 years 8 months ago

Thanks

Thanks for reading and the nice comment. I appreciate being here.

Race_9togo

Race_9togo

2 years 8 months ago

Good stuff.

Only problem is the word 'calls' in L4

Perhaps something like "I hear it in every LONELY bird CALL" instead?
or maybe 'echoing' instead or 'lonely', or perhaps 'far off'? Something like that.

Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 8 months ago

I love this

This is great. I love the theme. You’re a tight rhymer so this one fits into your style well but it’s very up lifting. I understand the lens through which you’re writing here and it’s one of my favorite moods.

Excellent
Tim